Guidelines for Enhancing Writing Clarity and Flow: A Revision Example

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Original Text Example

The article, discussing the impact of technology on society, begins by emphasizing that technological advancements have fundamentally reshaped our lives. However, the opening paragraph is somewhat unclear and lacks specific examples to illustrate its point. Here’s a revised version for clarity:

Revised Text Example

The advent of new technologies has significantly transformed existence across various domns, from communication and transportation to work and entertnment. This transformation underscores both the opportunities and challenges that technology presents in society today. For instance, smartphones not only enable instantaneous global connectivity but also facilitate an array of services that were once exclusive or merely conceivable decades ago. This introduction is more concise, provides specific examples for illustration, and sets up a clearer thesis for subsequent discussions.

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